BEST LEFT ALONE
20 PAGE THRILLER
LOGLINE: Returning home thirty years after the disappearance of her kid sister,
Tannis faces her worst nightmare when her sister’s spirit makes herself heard.
Of two sisters in a small town, being older by one year, Tannis takes the mom role to heart and takes her work at the post office very seriously. When she comes in to clean, light-hearted Dawn refuses to let Tannis kill her good mood. Tannis shoos out the Sheriff and storeowner who always hang around near closing. She does the paperwork and tidies behind the wicket while the postmaster possessively watches Dawn sweep and wash the floor.
Dawn goes to the store while Tannis goes home and makes supper. When Dawn doesn’t come home and her linebacker boyfriend Keith comes to pick her up, they go to the bar to report Dawn missing to the Sheriff. The postmaster throws blame on Tannis. The Sheriff sends her home to wait for Dawn. Come autumn with Dawn still missing, heartbroken,
Tannis packs up and leaves town.
Returning after thirty years, Tannis hires two teens, Keith’s able-bodied son Alan and Merry’s mouse-like son, Bail to help her convert the old post office into a café/gift shop. When a weird pinkish stain runs up the post office wall into the upstairs bedroom, Keith shores up the foundation without noticing the crack.
Things start moving from where Tannis put them. A dream of violence and blood wakes her in tears, the blood in her dream fades with the sunlight. A massive shift cracks the wall from the bedroom to the basement. Tannis, Alan and Bail freak. Keith investigates a bit of bone and cloth sticking out of the wider crack in the basement. As Tannis touches the cloth, the crack bursts open throwing Dawn’s remains on top of her.
Tannis and Keith know who did it as Dawn is finally laid to rest.
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